InkSpark Writing Academy

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@anthonyporter7aProfile pictureJul 21

Why "she was scared" doesn't work (and what to write instead)

If you've hit Chapter 2, you've run into the golden rule: show, don't tell. Most beginners nod along, agree it makes sense, and then keep writing "he was angry" anyway. Here's why — and the actual fix.


Telling is faster to write, so your brain defaults to it. But telling skips the part readers actually want: living the moment through the character's body and senses.


The fix isn't "never use feeling words." It's this simple swap:


  1. Write the telling sentence first. Don't fight it — it's just a placeholder. "She was scared."

  2. Ask: what would her body actually do? Hands shaking, breath caught, eyes locked on the door.

  3. Replace the label with the physical evidence. "Her hands wouldn't stop shaking, and she couldn't take her eyes off the door."


That's it. You're not adding flowery language — you're translating an emotion into a picture.


Drop a "telling" sentence from your current draft below and I'll help you turn it into a "showing" one. Best rewrite gets pinned. 🖋️

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@anthonyporter7aProfile pictureJul 7

The one habit that separates people who finish stories from people who don't

I've worked with a lot of beginner writers, and there's one pattern that predicts who finishes their first story and who doesn't: they stop editing while drafting.


Most people write a sentence, hate it, rewrite it, hate that too, and never make it past page one. It's not a talent problem — it's a sequencing problem.


Here's the fix I give every beginner:


  1. Write the ugly first draft in one sitting, no exceptions. Typos, plot holes, repeated words — leave them all.

  2. If you get stuck mid-sentence, type [FIX LATER] and keep going.

  3. Only after the whole thing exists do you go back and edit.


Separating 'making the words exist' from 'making the words good' is the single biggest unlock for new writers. It sounds too simple to work, but it's the difference between a finished short story and a dead Google Doc.


If you're starting out: pick one small idea, set a timer, and just get to the end. You can't edit a blank page.